Coruscant Entertainment Center

Star Wars: The Endless Darkness
Devizz

During TOR: After three centuries in stasis, Revan returns

Technical note: People who work aboard ship have their own slang. Go to Lucasforums>Coruscant Entertainment Center>The Resource Center>Ship nomenclature, or; It's not a door, it's a hatch blast it! To get what I am pointing out.

Basically a repeat of the story posted previously

Faceless
MsFicwriter

NSW Fiction: A child wonders about god.

As with most of her work so far, this sets up an interesting premise. I noticed that the questions the child asked fit no specific religion, yet have points where you can see your own at need. God is an invisible being, in this story so much so that the priests were faceless masks in imitation. 'God' speaks to the priests alone; whatever they say God said is the truth.

Even without being informed in the title heading that it would a horror story. I would have known it from the ending of the post.

kotorfanmedia

Birth Of The Demon
Scythe404

Minor things: You have Vandar using Yoda-speak, though the character does not. As for the schism caused by Revan leading out the few it isn't a great many people alarmed, it is the Councils themselves. This would explain the Exile's punishment; as the only one who did return, she bore the brunt of that displeasure.

Remember to sight edit, you have some cumbersome sentences. Also improper word usage, I am not sure what you meant with 'as if leaving the lair of a beast sooted', though I assume you meant sighted.

Technical note; Dxun was the first battle where the Jedi led, not the second to last.

It is an interesting look at the workings of the Jedi council, and the Exile of one Knight being used as a precedent to banish the one they feel responsible for teaching the ones who departed.

Return, Return
Enyria

Post TSL: Atton tracks down his sister, who has become Sith

The piece surprised me in that Atton had a sister. To search for her and found you have failed yet again is heartbreaking.

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Almost
Revan's Pet Duck

Pre TSL after Malachor V: Mira relives the worst day of her life.

The idea that Mira had someone she cared about that was killed in the war was interesting. I personally loathe the idea that the Mandalorians keep slaves, but that is my own irritation.

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On The Edge of Hearing
RogueLadySabyne

TSL Aboard Ravager: Visas is introduced

The piece is a much better intro for Visas than the game, which when you think of it was not hard. Her eagerness at being on the hunt fit her personality perfectly.

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A Snow Light
Hijozu Shan

TSL On Telos: For a moment, the crew is just human

The scene is well laid out, the provenance wonderful. Just for a moment, our main character is just a little girl remembering when she enjoyed snow before.

Call of the Dead
JediQB

TSK on Korriban: Atton is given a choice

The piece had a 'Christmas Carol' feel to it, and Korriban was the perfect planet for it. Having his kills arrive in sequence, and having them inflict a pain reminding him of their deaths was even better. The end was pretty much what you would have anticipated, and it is about time he made that admission.

Fanfiction.net

An Ale Between Two Strangers
Lossefalme

TSL on Citadel Station: A chance meeting between an old crew member and a new one

I was confused about who the old member was until they finally said his name, and Kreia's treatment of him left me cold. It's like the old saying that if the only tool you have is a hammer, all of your problems start looking like nails.

Darkest Knight
Sith Lord Darth Revan

Alternate Universe Pre KOTOR: What if not only the Jedi, but Malak failed?

The piece had some interesting moments in it Defeating the Jedi attack at the same moment that he's dealing with Malak's treachery, then using the same power supposedly within the Exile to turn the Jedi he has captured.

Fourteen chapters to date, but I only had time to read the one.

Path Abandoned
Cable Fraga

KOTOR aboard Ebon Hawk bound for Kashyyk: Revan has an idea, and the beginning of a proposal

The piece is a well written piece that suggests why she chose Canderous to later become Manda'lor. The only problem I had with it is the idea that the entire Mando'a race is nothing more than an unattended classroom in a school.

Baggage Claim
Trillian4210

Technical notes: Hoth is an iceball, Dagobah one massive swamp, Mustafar is an ongoing volcanic meltdown, Yavin IV is a backwater jungle and Taris had been destroyed. Why would they have scheduled transports? Going to the Yavin system might make sense with three inhabitable planets, though there is no mention of inhabitants beyond the Massassi (Extinct since the War of Exar Kun), and two Sith Strongholds about 4 centuries apart at this time.

Also, according to the Wookiepedia, it is in the Outer Rim so turning it into something you would do on a day trip (12 hours round trip) is expecting some serious suspension of disbelief.

I thought it was cute that Jolee had HK go all transformer on us, but unless he has some kind of gravity control built in, he would A: be far to heavy to carry aboard and B: still be a lot larger than say a gym bag, which is the largest bag allowed for carry on luggage these days.

Carte Blanche
Auros Sopherai

Post TSL on Nar Shadaa: Atton has a brief fling before making his decision

The piece is fun because at the same time he's trying to return to his old life he has an anchor to the new one, if he's willing to accept it. Having Bastila drop her 'Jedi Ice Princess' persona with him and more is a fun aside.

Tales of KOTOR: Thoughts Under the Midnight Moon
Dante-Raven

KOTOR Post Leviathan aboard Ebon Hawk: Carth has his chance at revenge... Will he take it?

The piece is dark, but there is light at the end of the tunnel. Carth is still having nightmares about Morgana's death, and to part of his mind the architect of that death is in one of the berthing areas. But will killing the so far redeemed Revan really pay for that?

Done in first person the piece flips back and forth, and you can see him standing there, gun in hand, as part of him every reason to kill the sleeping man, yet another part gives him every reason not to.

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